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Post by Spirk on Jan 5, 2005 18:22:48 GMT -5
Not Bad, short, sweet and to the point. There were a few run on sentances and such that I bet Robbie would gladly help you out with if you were to ask him.
All in all a good intro for a new character, I'm guessing there will be more?
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Post by ThegunsofNevada on Jan 6, 2005 0:39:10 GMT -5
Possibly, but probibly not...
Sry for the editing issues, I had to post it before jetting off to college, and I had no time to spell check, et cetera...Ill edit it later!
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Post by Ellie on Jan 9, 2005 21:13:09 GMT -5
that was short and sweet. good job. if you wanted you could go on.
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Post by Night Queen on Jan 10, 2005 21:23:36 GMT -5
He made me read it at school. And he should go on. After he fixes is grammer. I still can't beleive how fast you wrote that though. Or anything for that matter.
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