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Post by Ellie on Dec 20, 2004 12:34:51 GMT -5
good job, thanks for showing it to me i haven't had a normal dream since. last night was zombies and horrible sick dogs who were eating the zombies. now in the dream the dogs were dying, but they had a form of raibes and one bit me. how creepy is that. i woke up, but it didn't hurt the dogs mouth was stuck on my arm.
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Post by Spirk on Dec 20, 2004 14:42:44 GMT -5
I LOVED IT! Especially when Buddy was talking about how over rated Speilberg was, for a guy lacking brains he sounded pretty smart when it came to movies LOL Good job!
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Post by ThegunsofNevada on Dec 20, 2004 21:37:58 GMT -5
The only decent part was the barbarian’s sudden knowledge of movies.
There were major technical inconsitcies, and it was predictable.
Other than that, it was mediocre.
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Post by Spirk on Dec 21, 2004 11:01:54 GMT -5
LOL! This from the guy who can't spell to save his life!  |
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Post by ThegunsofNevada on Dec 21, 2004 21:55:53 GMT -5
As opposed to Spirk, who can’t comprehend what he reads...
Good job, Spirk...bring up something totally irrelevant to what I said!
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Post by Spirk on Dec 21, 2004 22:18:09 GMT -5
Actually the point I was making is that you can't spell worth a damn so living in a glass house maybe you shouldn't be casting stones? Try and be positive to encourage the writer to keep writing because that's what it takes to get better. (Practice Practice Practice) All you did was cut him off at the knees and critcize his story.
We do this for fun, not because we plan on being the next Stephen King.
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Post by Ellie on Dec 22, 2004 20:04:52 GMT -5
next stephen king never. i just want to hit number 9 on the new yor best seller list once in my life time. spirk is right, we need good criticism here. you learn better. like i write passive right spirk? guns needs to check over spelling, we all have problems. and for it being a spur of the moment story for a monthly challenge it was great. come on lighten up, ;D we're here to have some fun. |
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Post by Spirk on Dec 23, 2004 14:42:10 GMT -5
*Bows down before Ellie and promptly smacks head on the cold floor* oowwww......
But anyway...I gotta know Ellie...why #9? why not......#8 or maybe 6?
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Post by Ellie on Dec 25, 2004 14:05:03 GMT -5
just an ego thing. you know i can die happy knowing i was liked just a little.
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Post by Spirk on Dec 25, 2004 16:08:34 GMT -5
ok well I dunno about the others but I think I can honestly say I like ya "AT LEAST" a little  |
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Post by ThegunsofNevada on Dec 27, 2004 20:57:50 GMT -5
*Shrugs*
People don’t really learn when you’re nice, or not at least from my experience...People need more scar tissue.
And how the hell am I calling the kettle black when I’m not criticizing his spelling/grammar? My work is exhaustively researched and technically perfect, period. You will never, ever find an error in my work when it comes to ammunition, military tech, et cetera...That’s what I know.
But 'nough said.
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Post by Mixmastercereal on Dec 27, 2004 22:43:03 GMT -5
a story is not always made on if the statistics on the gun someone used is accurate, i'm not writing a handgun manual, i care more about the characters then in what weapon they are using
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Post by ThegunsofNevada on Dec 29, 2004 22:50:41 GMT -5
Ever read anything by Tom Clancy? Ever read any of my work?
Its not one or the other, having a good story and hardcore technical details. It just shows sloppiness!
After all, if you were writing a story about cleaning dishes, you would want to get the name of one of the brand of soaps right, wouldn’t you?
So why doesn’t that apply to a story about killing things? You want to put detail into what they’re using, because it’s a major flopping part of the story...
And its damn well important to these characters you prize so much, too. It shows a lot about some one, what type of weapon they carry. Its like the type of clothes you wear, or the type of car you drive, or what kind of music you like. Something big and brutal like a .44 magnum revolver? It says down to the point, quick, brutal. Something else, like a SIG or a Korth? Professorial, sleek, full of finesse and class. Understand what I'm saying?
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Post by Mixmastercereal on Dec 30, 2004 2:23:45 GMT -5
i don't really like clancy, with what i wrote, you get the idea of what kind of gun i was talking about, and again this is something i wrote in my spare time, if you want to criticize it, tell whats wrong with the characters or plot development, that would help more
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Post by Spirk on Dec 30, 2004 14:28:09 GMT -5
I agree with Mix on this. Who cares what kind of gun it was? The story is about Plot and character....You could tell that's where he was focusing it and I thought he did fine. You got to remember Gun that this was just a toss it together challenge story.
And as far as Clancy goes? The man puts me to sleep he's so damn boring. That's why I enjoy King, his stories are character driven and easy to read. If He writes about a gun (like in the Gunslinger) he will mention that they are old, and describe them a little bit but he doesn't mention the caliber, the make or how many grains or whatever. Because it doesn't matter.
If you want to write like clancy that's your deal, just don't expect the rest of us to bend over and do the same, we have our own styles, we have our own voices and it's not your place to tell us how, what, when or where to write our stories.
I'm not trying to be an ass but you need to stop trying to force your writing style on Mix, I kept quiet about the last few posts but enough is enough dude, we do this for fun.
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